Sunday, January 8, 2012

Please could you give feedback on the first few paragraphs of my book?

Good job of grabbing interest, but I would do it backwards: go from the wreckage in the streets to Rubie. Also, I really feel like I need to know how Rubie is feeling. Is she sad? Angry? Bored? Gleeful, even? Other than that , nice job.

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